Okay, so right now I'm in the middle of updating everything, so I might as well post the leads so I get SOME credit for them.
Narrative: Freshman year in high school was supposed to be exciting for Jamey Rodemeyer, who just entered Williamsville North High School this year. It was all about finally being able to grow up and decide your future. However, he faced the torment of bullies wherever he went until three weeks later, on September 18, he committed suicide to escape the pressures of bullying.
Startling Statement: People don't understand the fact that suicide is the third leading cause of death in the United States and all over the world. and it's getting worse.
Direct: If you're one of the millions of LGBT oriented teens, then you also could be part of the 90 percent of teens who are bullied in school due to their sexual orientation. This also means that you might be more prone to suicidal thoughts and/or committing suicide. Recently, Jamey Rodemeyer, a freshman of Williamsville North High School this year, committed suicide due to the constant taunts of anti-gay bullies who bullied him over his sexual orientation.
Narrative: Freshman year in high school was supposed to be exciting for Jamey Rodemeyer, who just entered Williamsville North High School this year. It was all about finally being able to grow up and decide your future. However, he faced the torment of bullies wherever he went until three weeks later, on September 18, he committed suicide to escape the pressures of bullying.
Startling Statement: People don't understand the fact that suicide is the third leading cause of death in the United States and all over the world. and it's getting worse.
Direct: If you're one of the millions of LGBT oriented teens, then you also could be part of the 90 percent of teens who are bullied in school due to their sexual orientation. This also means that you might be more prone to suicidal thoughts and/or committing suicide. Recently, Jamey Rodemeyer, a freshman of Williamsville North High School this year, committed suicide due to the constant taunts of anti-gay bullies who bullied him over his sexual orientation.
I like the second one a lot, and the first one. The last one seems a little tedious, though.
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The Narrative seemed the best, it has the most interesting way of explaining the situation. Good job! The other ones were also pretty good but the first one seemed more captivating.
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